Little Nibbles Cafe MM/f+ Vore Teen Victims.
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Little Nibbles Cafe MM/f+ Vore Teen Victims.
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Re: Little Nibbles Cafe MM/f+ Vore Teen Victims.
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Ch 03: Little Nibbles Café
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CH ?4: Little Nibbles Café
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Re: Little Nibbles Cafe MM/f+ Vore Teen Victims.
This story is so... perfect!
Although it has a few grammar errors and the line spacing makes it a bit difficult to read, the first chapter is definitely my favourite. The descriptions of all the minis and the interactions with them and the food and the almost vivid texture as they are touched and tasted... excellent!
The only thing I felt a bit lacking was the swallowing of prey being a bit abrupt and a "matter of fact" with minimal description, but this issue is mostly fixed by the later chapters. I do wish the prey squirmed a bit more once they were fully swallowed, though.
This entire concept was great and I wish it was real! This is definitely the sort of cafe I could see myself visiting once every one or two weeks, depends on how expensive it is.
Although it has a few grammar errors and the line spacing makes it a bit difficult to read, the first chapter is definitely my favourite. The descriptions of all the minis and the interactions with them and the food and the almost vivid texture as they are touched and tasted... excellent!
The only thing I felt a bit lacking was the swallowing of prey being a bit abrupt and a "matter of fact" with minimal description, but this issue is mostly fixed by the later chapters. I do wish the prey squirmed a bit more once they were fully swallowed, though.
This entire concept was great and I wish it was real! This is definitely the sort of cafe I could see myself visiting once every one or two weeks, depends on how expensive it is.
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Re: Little Nibbles Cafe MM/f+ Vore Teen Victims.
Yes, my grammar is a work in progress. I am hoping as I craft more and more stories I am improving. Someday I might break down and actually get a grammar program to help me out. When I do my limited editing I try to read the story but I am mostly looking to see if the ideas flow. More of a conversational communications then written phrasing. Still I understand not technically correct. As for the spacing, that was requested be several readers on past sites I posted on. And I honestly find in easier to follow. But I'm not much of an online reader. Which amuses me as a poster of online stories.
The lack of post swallowing description is likely due to my habit of knowing where I want the scene to go and not focusing on where the scene is. I type much slower then the descriptions are moving through my imagination. Really I need to slow down. In all my stories, not just this one.
If you want you can feel free to write a customer of the Little Nibbles Café. I can answer any questions you might have about it.
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Added Later: I'm sorry. In my confessions of my short comings I forgot what should have been my first statement. Thank you for the comment. I am grateful for your input and glad I was able to entertain you. I hope you also find my other stories entertaining. I can only grow as a writer with such helpful advice. Thank you again.
The lack of post swallowing description is likely due to my habit of knowing where I want the scene to go and not focusing on where the scene is. I type much slower then the descriptions are moving through my imagination. Really I need to slow down. In all my stories, not just this one.
If you want you can feel free to write a customer of the Little Nibbles Café. I can answer any questions you might have about it.
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Added Later: I'm sorry. In my confessions of my short comings I forgot what should have been my first statement. Thank you for the comment. I am grateful for your input and glad I was able to entertain you. I hope you also find my other stories entertaining. I can only grow as a writer with such helpful advice. Thank you again.
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Re: Little Nibbles Cafe MM/f+ Vore Teen Victims.
Sorry for my very late reply, I have a serious procrastination problem.
First off, I'm glad you liked my feedback!
Secondly, what exactly do you mean when you say I can write my own customer for the Little Nibbles Café? Do you mean I can write my own story that takes place in the same universe but from the perspective of my own character? Should I put the character/story here, or create a separate thread?
Sorry if this should be obvious. I'm the sort of person who needs these sorts of things explained. (I'm still fairly new to this whole "interacting with an online community" thing.)
First off, I'm glad you liked my feedback!
Secondly, what exactly do you mean when you say I can write my own customer for the Little Nibbles Café? Do you mean I can write my own story that takes place in the same universe but from the perspective of my own character? Should I put the character/story here, or create a separate thread?
Sorry if this should be obvious. I'm the sort of person who needs these sorts of things explained. (I'm still fairly new to this whole "interacting with an online community" thing.)
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Re: Little Nibbles Cafe MM/f+ Vore Teen Victims.
Just got up, so my brain is a little foggy so if some of my reply is confusing I'm sorry.
No need to apologize. We all get doing stuff. I'm glad to have gotten your feedback.
As for the customer thing, yeah basically. Write a costumer's (or a groups) dinner experience at the Café. Put your take on a meal there. If you plan on writing just one story I'm fine with you putting it here. If you plan out a series with the character then make a sperate thread. But that's just my suggestion. You can PM me questions you might have about the world. I would like to read it before you post just to make sure it fits within the rules I have for this universe, but I'm fairly easy going so I wouldn't worry about me being too harsh.
I'm hoping you'll write a story (or more) and have fun with it. This concept I thought worked well for collaborations.
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No need to apologize. We all get doing stuff. I'm glad to have gotten your feedback.
As for the customer thing, yeah basically. Write a costumer's (or a groups) dinner experience at the Café. Put your take on a meal there. If you plan on writing just one story I'm fine with you putting it here. If you plan out a series with the character then make a sperate thread. But that's just my suggestion. You can PM me questions you might have about the world. I would like to read it before you post just to make sure it fits within the rules I have for this universe, but I'm fairly easy going so I wouldn't worry about me being too harsh.
I'm hoping you'll write a story (or more) and have fun with it. This concept I thought worked well for collaborations.
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Little Nibbles Cafe: Cannelloni
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Re: Little Nibbles Cafe MM/f+ Vore Teen Victims.
HE LIVES!
Jokes aside, I've been very looking forward to this or "That Portal" getting an update for a while now. I understand how the summer heat can just destroy your creative energy. I myself only managed to make like 2 half-stories during the entire summer.
As for the story at hand, I love it! Side stories and little snippets into the lives of the Little Nibbles patrons seems like an ideal format for this kind of setting. (I myself have ideas for a side story if I ever get around to finally writing it).
I really like how the accents now have dialogue, as opposed to previous chapters where the narration merely summarized what they were saying. The story and history of Brian and his accents of choice was very interesting to read. I also like the increased emphasis on the accents squirming as they are swallowed down. I hadn't even thought of the idea that someone could order and keep multiple clones of the same accent. I also like Clare's little edible outfit and her kind and innocent demeanor in contrast to the four who came before her. Young meat is good!
I am very much feeling the tease of what happens when a waitress screws up and the contrast between an accent and a genuine shrunken person.
My only complaint would be that the ending felt a bit abrupt. Maybe we could have had a bit of a longer look at Brian's shrunken harem of many identical girls?
Anyways, it's 3 AM and those are my thoughts. Glad to have you back, you inspire my creativity (and depraved fantasies)!
Jokes aside, I've been very looking forward to this or "That Portal" getting an update for a while now. I understand how the summer heat can just destroy your creative energy. I myself only managed to make like 2 half-stories during the entire summer.
As for the story at hand, I love it! Side stories and little snippets into the lives of the Little Nibbles patrons seems like an ideal format for this kind of setting. (I myself have ideas for a side story if I ever get around to finally writing it).
I really like how the accents now have dialogue, as opposed to previous chapters where the narration merely summarized what they were saying. The story and history of Brian and his accents of choice was very interesting to read. I also like the increased emphasis on the accents squirming as they are swallowed down. I hadn't even thought of the idea that someone could order and keep multiple clones of the same accent. I also like Clare's little edible outfit and her kind and innocent demeanor in contrast to the four who came before her. Young meat is good!
I am very much feeling the tease of what happens when a waitress screws up and the contrast between an accent and a genuine shrunken person.
My only complaint would be that the ending felt a bit abrupt. Maybe we could have had a bit of a longer look at Brian's shrunken harem of many identical girls?
Anyways, it's 3 AM and those are my thoughts. Glad to have you back, you inspire my creativity (and depraved fantasies)!
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Re: Little Nibbles Cafe MM/f+ Vore Teen Victims.
Thanks for the input. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
I'm sorry about the abrupt feeling of the ending. I'm still learning this craft. I was trying to express Brain's excitement to be kept human and his access to an accent he had wanted for a while but wouldn't order for himself. A more, too happy to be alive to savor his moment. Clearly I didn't do that. Hopefully I will do better in the future.
If it helps your story any when accents are dressed for a meal their outfits are all edible. So you can have them dressed in the meal if you like. Maybe peeled like a blooming onion.
Oh, the genuine shrunken people are supposed to be only for board members and/or their special guests. I wouldn't want to be that waitress, that is grounds for dismissal. And well, Little Nibbles Cafe doesn't have a severance package.
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I'm sorry about the abrupt feeling of the ending. I'm still learning this craft. I was trying to express Brain's excitement to be kept human and his access to an accent he had wanted for a while but wouldn't order for himself. A more, too happy to be alive to savor his moment. Clearly I didn't do that. Hopefully I will do better in the future.
If it helps your story any when accents are dressed for a meal their outfits are all edible. So you can have them dressed in the meal if you like. Maybe peeled like a blooming onion.
Oh, the genuine shrunken people are supposed to be only for board members and/or their special guests. I wouldn't want to be that waitress, that is grounds for dismissal. And well, Little Nibbles Cafe doesn't have a severance package.
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Re: Little Nibbles Cafe MM/f+ Vore Teen Victims.
I could only afford one accent today unfortunately.
For a bit of context, I was playing around with some AI, and this one reminded me of your story, so here it is
For a bit of context, I was playing around with some AI, and this one reminded me of your story, so here it is
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Well Thank you. I'm glad my story had an impression on you.
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