White Labs

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White Labs

Post by HHunter1 » Thu Jul 13, 2023 2:30 am

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CH 02: White Labs

Post by HHunter1 » Thu Sep 21, 2023 2:26 pm

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Re: White Labs

Post by DocRick » Fri Sep 22, 2023 1:49 pm

You have a very nice style of writing. The story flows smoothly, just the right mixture of nouns, verbs, adjectives, and adverbs. Not overly descriptive like the AI stuff with its monotonous and excessive droning on with its repetitive fluff. The story is an easy and enjoyable read, placing the reader in the place of the main character. Kudos.

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Re: White Labs

Post by HHunter1 » Fri Sep 22, 2023 2:12 pm

Well thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I do try to be an easy read. I aim to have my descriptions clear and easy to understand. Though I do worry that at times I might be rushing through them. It nice knowing at least in this chapter I didn't do that.

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